Francisco
Reyes
11
February 2014
Professor
Fleischer
English
1A
Personal Literacy Narrative
I’m just a simple writer and speaker
with skills that can’t be compared to a summer’s eve or an articulate author of
high caliber literacy skills. My writing, speaking, and reading skills are
possessed because of experiences, influential people, and other memorable
influences. Of course some influences are more monumental to me than others.
Without these experiences and influences my literacy composition wouldn’t be
what it is today. The writing and speaking skills I possess can be attributed
to the many years of soccer I played, the interaction with people online, and
living in the same location since my existence.
Soccer has been in my life for over
13 years. The many teams I have played on have brought new and different
teammates. I had to form some type of relationship with every one of them but
some were much closer friendships that lasted longer. The relationships were
formed by communicating, speaking, and articulating amongst each other on
similar levels. With that said, the way I spoke with my teammates varied
dramatically from on and off the field. On the field we spoke with seriousness
and a sense of professionalism because as athletes that completed at a
competitive level throughout the country we felt we had job-like
responsibilities. Off the field however we were at ease with each other and
capable of being enthusiastic and comedic when we conversed. The tone and
demeanor used when speaking on the field couldn’t be taken to heart because
playing soccer was essentially our job so if one of us was slacking we had to
let the other teammate know in an assertive yet respectful manner to pick up
the quality of our performance. I thought we executed being assertive and
respectful rather well because once we stepped off the field and entered a friendly
state it was as if the on the field problems never existed but swiftly resumed
once we went back to playing on the field.
The soccer team I played for had
many Hispanic players and most of which spoke both English and Spanish. I
myself do not speak Spanish which made me hurdle and get around the language
problem on the field. But thankfully off the field this problem didn’t occur.
In time I learned what the other guys were saying in Spanish and I picked up
the Spanish soccer terminology easily. Speaking in another language wasn’t a
type of secret code to confuse the team but more of cultural norm Hispanic
soccer players had. The players contributed and helped me learn the terms such
as “pasala” meaning pass it or “cruzala” which translates to cross it; “It”
being the soccer ball.
Because my teammates and I were
teenagers we tended to speak in what seemed normal to us but provocative to
older people or adults. Sometimes the way we talked in public would come with
consequences or learning experiences. For instance, once we traveled to
southern California for a soccer tournament and we had to stay in a hotel
because the tournament was multiple days. In between games we were in the lobby
of the hotel and conversed amongst ourselves like we normally we would but only
this time there was older women not affiliated with us that stayed at the hotel
and were also in the lobby. The women filed a formal complaint to the hotel and
the hotel reacted immediately and nearly kicked us out. Unfortunately our
parents found out and never let us forget that instance at all the tournaments
that followed so our freedom was limited because of the way we spoke. It was a
good lesson to take with us and move forward from as far as a speaking stand
point.
Social media has a significant in my
life from a writing aspect. Identifying and being able to use the English
language in social media and for academic purposes has proposed a hefty problem
that has made me a conscious writer. Analyzing my own writing (or typing)
formality is often accomplished when looking at my computer or cell phone.
Because the use of informal social media and formal academic writings occur
both on my phone and computer knowing when to type in certain manners becomes
an issue. For example, I use email to get and respond to social media
notifications. With that same email I may also have to respond to an email
received from a professor or interviewer from a job. If I utilize the same
speech patterns to a professor as I would to a friend I surely would find that
it wouldn’t be in my best interest to use the same writing style for different
stages of formality. Separating informal and formal writing is a developing
trait I have yet to master which in time I hope to be able to know write in the
appropriate setting without having to consciously think about what I am
writing.
Lastly I feel that the location I
have lived in all my life has played a major role on the way I speak or
converse with others. Being a northern California native from Sacramento has
embedded the way I speak. The way I speak to individuals my age has always
seemed normal and so right because until recently everyone I communicated and
affiliated with was from Sacramento also. Since I’ve attended Sacramento State
University I’ve spoken with people from many different backgrounds and various
regions in California. I’ve discovered that people from other places don’t
necessarily admire or like my informal lingo and this too has made me a
conscious speaker. Students that originate from Southern California greatly
resent some terms I use in my speech. The most notable term that southern
California students dislike is the slang term “hella”. I use informally use the
term to express a vast amount of something. I’ve been trying to eliminate the
term from my language but as of lately I feel that I should utilize any word I
desire as long as it doesn’t conflict with formal writings.
My writing and speaking skills
derive from my everyday experiences and previous encounters I’ve learned from.
These experiences have been lessons that I have learned from in order to progress
or become comfortable with. While my articulation is not of a supreme quality
it is distinct and unique to me.
"Draft 2"
ReplyDeleteVirtual Peer Review
ReplyDelete1. What I like most about your paper is your personal experience on how social media and interaction over the internet have affected your literacy. Reading your experience made me reflect and realize that the use of internet has impacted the way I write as well.
2. Based off of the thesis I am able to tell that the paper is going to be about your personal experiences and how they have influenced your literacy. After having read your paper your thesis is very clear and it creates a layout for the paragraphs that you used in your paper. You fulfill all of the requirements, except for two which I will explain next.
3. Some things to add to your paper to fulfill the requirements would be to add an introductory paragraph that tells us a little about yourself and a paragraph at the end that will tell us how you plan to use literacy after school.
4. Each of your paragraphs discusses only one idea, and everything in the paragraph is related to that specific idea.
5. Overall I like the personal experiences that you chose to put in your thesis. Your paper is structured well based off of your thesis and the paragraphs are clear. As I had mentioned above, just include an introductory paragraph and a paragraph at the end. Besides that it would be good to add where you stand right now on literacy; for example whether you enjoy reading and writing.
Ivan Ramirez
ReplyDelete1.) I like that the paper is very well written and the voice is very professional. The part that I enjoyed the most was the soccer part of it because I can relate to all those examples.
2.) A) I think that this paper is about how soccer, living in the same city, and social media influence his reading and writing.
B) I believe that it does a very good job at addressing the above points because it covers many good examples.
C) It does fulfill the requirements.
3. I believe that the he could go I to more detail about how living in the same city throughout his whole life has affected his writing skills. More examples.
4.) Each of your paragraphs discusses only one idea and everything in that paragraph is related to the one idea
5.) I think that this essay was very well written and was very easy to read. It had many big words that made the paper sound professional and actually made me enjoy reading it. The only criticism that I have is about the born and raised part of the paper. I would like to hear more examples from that point of view to visualize it better. Other than that the paper had many good facts and I enjoyed reading it. Especially the parts about soccer and its own language.